tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5555136190302766593.post7663928008636995679..comments2017-10-15T14:11:49.786+02:00Comments on Of Orcs and Men: Kruzz IVKai Delmashttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14913623803715499069noreply@blogger.comBlogger5125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5555136190302766593.post-56096604065470414272015-03-31T19:43:14.216+02:002015-03-31T19:43:14.216+02:00I didn't really feel like tutelage worked eith...I didn't really feel like tutelage worked either, but the word slipped into my head and I really liked the sound of it. So... I use dit. ;)Kai Delmashttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14913623803715499069noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5555136190302766593.post-13191315924708594282015-03-31T18:31:52.971+02:002015-03-31T18:31:52.971+02:00I didn't think it was clunky, I actually liked...I didn't think it was clunky, I actually liked that bit especially. Also, obviously he's quick minded or he wouldn't be in this unique position.<br />I like the idea that the elder wants to make him a sort of icon, not for Kruzz, but to use him, his ability and his thirst to prove himself for his own means. There is a war coming and they will need everyone to be eager to fight.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5555136190302766593.post-56997546962227157542015-03-30T20:22:52.278+02:002015-03-30T20:22:52.278+02:00Meh, I wouldn't call it tutelage. More like ni...Meh, I wouldn't call it tutelage. More like nitpicking ;)Tomhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11749647252820873758noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5555136190302766593.post-56753551161845859412015-03-16T14:26:05.560+01:002015-03-16T14:26:05.560+01:00Thanks!
The sentences about being the predator an...Thanks!<br /><br />The sentences about being the predator and thus having to fight a predator or waiting for prey to have easy prey resulted from an epiphany. The idea just suddenly came to me and I felt the need to put it in writing. Though I see what you mean about it being clunky.<br /><br />I would have also loved to prolong the fight, but the post was already long enough as it is. I believe it's the longest post I've made so far and that's without counting the previous post that is actually still part of it.<br /><br />Glad to be improving under your tutelage. ;)Kai Delmashttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14913623803715499069noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5555136190302766593.post-66156807437954538692015-03-15T18:39:36.004+01:002015-03-15T18:39:36.004+01:00Interesting ritual, the going in a spiral and attr...Interesting ritual, the going in a spiral and attracting the prey/predator by blood on the trees. I like it, it's very Orc-y and fits the image I had of Orcs very well. <br /><br />The fight in and of itself is better than the one between Ragnar (?) and Dax as far as I'm concerned. I do think Kruzz came to the correct conclusion a bit quickly (there could have been a few more near misses, and Kruzz learning his lessons a bit more step-by-step than all at once), and I feel that this entire section is a bit clunky:<br /><br />"What Dax had said about meaning was starting to sink in. What if the action of getting up and searching for your prey was what led you to a predator, because you are like a predator, going on the hunt? And what if sitting here, waiting for prey, let's the easy prey come to you, because you don't look like a threat?"<br /><br />Maybe that's a question of taste, but I feel like the first sentence would have been sufficient to transport that meaning. The previous Kruzz chapter was right before this one, so that could have been handled differently, I think.<br /><br />Still, it's an improvement on several fronts. Similar situations handled differently (and better!) than before. I like.Tomhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11749647252820873758noreply@blogger.com