tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5555136190302766593.post8113963635474454180..comments2017-10-15T14:11:49.786+02:00Comments on Of Orcs and Men: Grim IIIKai Delmashttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14913623803715499069noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5555136190302766593.post-54646021488388303622015-05-10T21:24:30.865+02:002015-05-10T21:24:30.865+02:00Thanks for the positive feedback. Took some of you...Thanks for the positive feedback. Took some of your other positive feedback about how you liked Dax and how different he was and tried to spread it to Grim as well.<br /><br />Also, the blurred lines were on purpose. Glad you enjoyed it. ;)Kai Delmashttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14913623803715499069noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5555136190302766593.post-50707697121997626942015-05-05T13:34:23.260+02:002015-05-05T13:34:23.260+02:00For the lack of a better word - these scenes of &q...For the lack of a better word - these scenes of "humanity" (orcity?) are super-important for non-human races. It gives them a depth and a sense of civilization that goes beyond simple intelligence, so I'm glad this shows up. Regard for the young, even among the tough folk, is instantly positively received by readers as far as I think.<br /><br />Grim and Dax being of like mind is also nice, because it shows that the "standard orc" and the weirdo have something very important in common, which wasn't exactly the case until now. Especially because he immediately wanted to know whether the beast was at least dead.<br /><br />I didn't get it at first that Grim was remembering something, or rather, when the memory stopped and when it started. Paragraphs 2 to 4 are the ones, and I'd show this by shifting the tense: "Orcs had lain dead..." etc. Then again, perhaps blurring these lines is what you were aiming for? If so, it worked for me. When Grim knocked over that jug, I wasn't sure when that jug got knocked over. There's a certain enjoyment in figuring that out for sure.Tomhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11749647252820873758noreply@blogger.com